I'm Writing a Screenplay

I've always been interested in writing a screenplay. Me and my friends will sit down and think of skits. Little things that I see or hear contribute to everything I write. I hear 1 word and I've already written the entire skit in my head even before writing it down or telling people.

I carry around a notebook and am constantly writing down Ideas. I have 3 or 4 Movie Synopsis that I've written.

Only recently have me and a friend sat down and actually start writing one. A little heads up, the movie is Vulgar, but I wanted to post an exert from my Screenplay here.

My Movie is about the laziest man in the world, trying to invent the next big thing to avoid getting an actual job doing menial labor. Here it is, Product of Lazy.

Allow me to setup the Scene. The Main character Jack was supposed to be getting a Job but he isn't able to. Him and his room mate get into a big fight about him being a loser and they talk about Jacks inventions. He wants to showcase them for Carl and these are the results.

Scene Three: Tests

*It shows them outside in the driveway. The camera is on the ground in front of a pair of shoes. Jack walks into them and puts the Velcro around the back of his ankle and attaches it to the other side.*

CARL

Okay. So which failed closet bound project are you going to demonstrate to me first?

JACK

I present to you. The Scratchington Infinity.

CARL

It's a hanger. With a headband taped to it.

JACK

Oh it is? Really? No shit, I'm glad you can accurately convey to me what it is that I, Me, Myself invented, and the contents of it's appearance. Now. What we have here isn't your ordinary headband and hanger. It is the back scratcher. You stick the headband on. Point the stretched end down towards your back, and when you need to scratch your back you just lean your head back and pull it up again. It gives perfect leverage to scratch. Allow me to demonstrate.

*Jack leans his head back and the hooked end of the hangar goes into the back of his pants. He feels it and pulls up real quick hooking his asshole and tearing it. You can hear it tear.*

JACK

SWEET MOTHER OF GODDD!

CARL

What? What the hell happened?

JACK

*Jack says in a high pitched voice* Nothing, just gonna go inside and check on something.​

So it's just a small small exert from the movie, wanted to see what you guys thought of it. The Screenplay is about 90 pages long and am working on getting a budget for amateur filming.

 

Wow, seems really good so far. You should try to perform it and post it on YouTube and then you could post it on Sythe.

 

Thanks a lot, it seems like it would be easier to write as you get along in the story which to a certain degree holds truth. But it's hard to cap off the story and to plot out certain points in the movie where events will take place.

I would do that, but I don't want any REAL recognition for it in places where it could become popular or fail. I'd rather build my entire screenplay then get the filming for it done. So It can be released as a whole instead of in segments to see what people think of the quality.

I'm still working on it, as you can see from what I wrote it is going to be a Comedy. I've done most of the work on it and do all the writing. I have friends that are writing it that more or less just present ideas and help me fill in the holes that I can't.

I'm, 18 so I don't know who would budget a kid like me.

 

I agree with Aroxez. Post it on Youtube then bring it here to Sythe. I like it so far. Keep up the good work .

 

Thanks, like I said that's a small exert out of about 90 pages or so haha, so I'm trying to find closure for the movie.

 

sounds quite good, just a couple of tips with writing scripts.


(doing drama at uni and had to do a screenplay unit for a year)

Main things realy needed (dont know if you have them already are such things as propper location, either inside ie: INT or outside ie: EXT, also its good to put day and night into the location as well so you can organise filming around that, so you might film multiple night scenes over the space of 1 night and a bit more description in the location. With making a film, a lot of the time it is all image based so you need to set up the right description of the location e.t.c.

For an example of what ive written above, here is some of my script which i did for uni.


EXT. JOHN’S HOUSE - DAY
Up a side street you can see the backs of shops to the right with a small car park and a grass bank separating Johns house from the shops.
Up at the top the road curves round to the left with the back of more shops visible and also another road leading to the main road with a mini supermarket across from it.
John’s house is the only one on this side with the rest being on other streets branching out from this road.
John’s house seems to have been a two story house before but with a loft conversion you can now clearly see three floors. The back yard just seems like a small triangle shape with a 7ft wall blocking it from view. Rather than most of the houses the walls of this house are pebble dashed giving it a more rustic feeling.
Woman’s Voice Yelling (O.S)
John get downstairs now and
do the dishes. If you don’t
get down here now I’m going to
come up there and give you
such a smack over the head.
Some passers by pause to listen to the argument unfold and then carry on walking.
Woman’s Voice (CONT’D O.S)
John I’m warning you get down
here now otherwise I’m going to
come up there and give you such
a slap.

John’s Voice (O.S)
I’M COMING MAM!!! JUST GIVE ME
TWO SECCONDS IM FINISHING MY HOMEWORK.


INT. JOHN’S BEDROOM – DAY
The door closes as John Leaves the Room. Ineligible shouts are heard from downstairs presumably coming from an argument between John and his mother. The sound of drumming is coming from upstairs.
Johns room is a mess just like any other normal teenager’s bedroom but some things mark this as differed.
On the left hand side there is a Wooden Double Bed with a bit of metal hanging down the side of the top post with rope wrapped around part of it making it look like a handle.
Tissues are littering the floor with red stains on them while on the bedside table there is a pocket knife with blood dripping from the blade.