Subject Fight Its my time Its my day First high school fight Whats going through his mind Whats going through mine I don't know what to do I don't know what to say Everything is in slow-motion Butterflies in my stomach Tears in my eyes He raised his fist at me I didn't know what to do So I raised my fist and I hit him first Right in the nose Blood started dripping Blood started pooring I think I broke his nose I think I one the fight That was my day And this is my time Comments?
I don't see it as a rap looks more like poetry , pretty short, make it longer and with more rhyme/flow.
WHAT THE FUCK.... Kidding... You need to work on it more, and put some rhymes in there. Oh and you spelled won wrong.
I think it is pretty good. You should change this Switch "Its my time" around with "Its my day". I just did freestyle with these lyrics and swapping these around makes it sound better in my opinion. Edit: Oh, also I find it better ending with the main subject of rap lyrics that you started with. So at the end I find it better with "My first high schooll fight".
I think i one the fight? Was that supposed to be some sort of play on words, or did you actually write one instead of won?
