I need some feedback please??

First off this is my new song.
I really wanna add it to ma new Mixtape
only problem is its very different then any other songs ive done =\
PLease tell me what yall think... thanks in advance

Lyrics for verses 1 and 3
VERSE 1
now look you could either be ma lover or you could be more
picture us walkin holdin hands on the beach by the shore
i understand that you still got feelings for ya ex
but ya future would be so much better if u choose me as ya next
why be just friends and buddies?
when one day you could be wifey and i could be hubby.
like mario let me love you and you can love me.
think about me touchin you and you could touch me
and if this is try outs i know you could never cut me.
if you wanna just be friends thas just somethin i just cant accept.
i wanna be with you and not just havin sex
whatever you choose make sure you can live with it
cuz no matter what ima keep tryin to get it.

VERSE 2 by dmac - dont feel like listenin to type it.

VERSE 3

LEt me help you make ya decision
i got money for the mind call it tuition.
let me grant every single thing that you is wishin.
if you choose me no matter how many there are i am done fishin
neva keep nothin from you nothin is hidden
what im tryin to do is tell you to listen.
to chorus of this song.
choose me nothings goin wrong.
but always goin right.
but if i am wrong will you come and show me right?
let me repeat the point of this song again
let me repeat the point of this song again
I wanna be oh so much more than friends
I wanna be oh so much more than friends.
I wanna be oh so much more.
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Are you wearing a wig?

Instrumental is dumb... Lyric's are ok.. But Instrumental is dumb.

 

It's okay, I like the lyrics I understood but the voice is hard to hear at some parts. I don't like how the voice is edited, the song could be just as good with your real voice or not as edited, sounds a bit like t-pain

 

I think you have T-Pain confused with Weezy.

 

nah dude lol i had dreads like a year ago. had to cut em they were disgusting

 

yeah its the auto tune effect. i dont usually sing [mainly bcuz i cant] so i used the effect

 

i take this as a compliment.

 

I'm not into this type of music, but yea, I think it's decent. I can't understand the lyrics, but it's at least listenable.

 

thanks dude thats def a good thing if u dont like this kinda music

 

Ehhh, that looks like a wig if you ask me. Lol

 

lol thas horrible

 

It's so thin, it almost looks like weave.

 

I saw what you were trying to do with the music, it sounded familiar. The lyrics, didn't really get them. I'd appritiate if you posted the lyrics, so we could evaluate.

 

holy shit sounds like weezy

 

kk gimme a few

 

THANKS =] =] =] =]

 

It's decent, but I really don't like this type of music in general. You sound like Lil Wayne for the most part.

Overall: Decent, just not my type

 

I think you just heard a Weezy song, and think the lyric's are the same.

You should honestly change the instrumental in your next song...

I don't like girlyyy song's for rap, I like underground rap, hardcore rap.. Nothing weak.

 

lyrics up

 

Umm i wouldnt use the same instrumental twice..
also i dont know what u mean by heard a weezy song and think the lyrics are the same but i write ma own music =\
Also i dont really do much hardcore rap but i am workin on something called swagga risin youd prolly like