Yo this is my shit Yo ass finna get hit all my other raps rhyme with bit so I finna stop with it. nigga gonna bust some chops boutta get 'rested by them cops clean you ass up with a couple mops then take them mops cops and chops and open up a couple shops to sell that shit and baseball mits and I'm rhyming with shit again yo momma's a fat hen fuckin all them men specially that nigga Ben I'm not writing this shit with a pen ya dig? I'm big aint no nig lemme get a cig you fat bastard pig I aint eva had a fig imma make this rap part of my gig ya feel me? we I gotta pee mother fuckin bumble bee dexters sister is deedee got dat key? This is a good rap I aint even need a map But I do need a nap No I'm not a trap seran wrap monkey tap monkey is an animal yo momma is an animal and a frog this damn fog yo mom is also a fat hog my dick is like a log I put my log in the hog in the fog That's part one of my new mix tape I'm tossin around. Lemme know whatchoo thank.
Honestly, you have good metaphors, but you don't know how to use them. I barely see any sort of flow lyrically besides the fact that you're rhyming basically every three words together.
This pretty much it, I also did find it amusing. It sounded like more of a poem in the end. Also for this line Not exactly sure how the tone goes, but I think it's 1-2 syllable too many. I'd remove bastard, or if you want to remove just 1 syllable put "big fat pig"
I'll rate your shit if you rate mine. Be honest you mother fucker. All in all this was a good rap but it seems a little simple, or maybe the verses are just to short. If you extend each verse and it's not just log hog dog I think it would be a lot better.
Yeaa dawg, ya know, that's what I'm tryina do. It's my first shizzle, so we'll see what the future holds. I know this rap is ILL and you probably think there's no way I can possibly make it better, but there is and you'll see... you'll see.
Yeah this made me roll, and sounded like a 13 year old was trying to rap. Also wouldn't it be good to post a beat along with your rap. Probably would be better to follow.
i get money your my honey beastiality nigga get me a bunny get paid er'day like 4 hunny i weigh my white shts like 4 tunny Fuck boys think this is funny? Sniffin so much my nose gets runny Go Se7en, gluttony boy and you chubby Jewish nigga let me call my bubby Go to an asian massage and a gets tuggy Ill ride out this bitch like im in a Dune Buggy. Fuck boy, anyone can rhyme like that.
I can already tell you're one of those hollister tryhard faggots by the amount of times I've seen you post fuckboy.. OT, this is pretty dope, made me lol.
