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Well this is a film script ive written and i wondered what you guys thought of it.
Originally posted by King Leonidas
My script for my Uni assignment @ Northumbria Uni: Matthew Kalina.
Just incase it gets flagged for copywright infringement.
11 pages worth.
Only so much!
BY MATTHEW KALINA ©
4TH DRAFT
EXT. JOHN’S HOUSE – DAY
Up a side street you can see the backs of shops to the right with a small car park and a grass bank separating Johns house from the shops.
Up at the top the road curves round to the left with the back of more shops visible and also another road leading to the main road with a mini supermarket across from it.
John’s house is the only one on this side with the rest being on other streets branching out from this road.
John’s house seems to have been a two story house before but with a loft conversion you can now clearly see three floors. The back yard just seems like a small triangle shape with a 7ft wall blocking it from view. Rather than most of the houses the walls of this house are pebble dashed giving it a more rustic feeling.
Woman’s Voice Yelling (O.S)
John get downstairs now and
do the dishes. If you don’t
get down here now I’m going to
come up there and give you
such a smack over the head.
Some passers by pause to listen to the argument unfold and then carry on walking.
Woman’s Voice (CONT’D O.S)
John I’m warning you get down
here now otherwise I’m going to
come up there and give you such
a slap.
John’s Voice (O.S)
I’M COMING MAM!!! JUST GIVE ME
TWO SECCONDS IM FINISHING MY HOMEWORK.
CUT TO: CUT TO
INT. JOHN’S BEDROOM – DAY
The door closes as John Leaves the Room. Ineligible shouts are heard from downstairs presumably coming from an argument between John and his mother. The sound of drumming is coming from upstairs.
Johns room is a mess just like any other normal teenager’s bedroom but some things mark this as differed.
On the left hand side there is a Wooden Double Bed with a bit of metal hanging down the side of the top post with rope wrapped around part of it making it look like a handle.
Tissues are littering the floor with red stains on them while on the bedside table there is a pocket knife with blood dripping from the blade.
CUT TO:
EXT. SCHOOL PLAYGROUND – DAY
The school playground is empty as a police car pulls up and John jumps out.
John
Bye dad.
The car pulls away as John slams the door closed and starts running to the school entrance.
CUT TO:
INT. SCIENCE CLASSROOM – DAY
Five rows of work benches with wooden tops are in this room. Each table has plug sockets in the middle as well as gas nozzles for the Bunsen burners. You can see children mucking about in the room while others just sit back and smoke using the Bunsen burners as lighters.
Voice (O.S)
Hey no running in the hall!
The door slams open as John runs in and takes his seat at the front of the class.
Joe
What John don’t want to be
late for your boyfriend now
do you?
The door opens again as the teacher walks in looking old-fashioned.
Mr Cox
Right class, today were going
to be burning peanuts to see
how much energy they give.
Joe
You’d know all about nuts sir
wouldn’t you? With your bum
buddy John.
Mr Cox
Right Joe thats enough. Go to the
Headmasters office NOW!
Joe leaves the room.
Mr Cox (CONT’D)
So I want everyone to go to
the back of the class and get
their equipment and then come
back to the front and start.
There is a mad rush to the back of the class where you can see a few punches thrown at John. Everyone goes back to their seats and you can see John with his nose bleeding and his shirt with splatters of blood on.
Mr Cox
What happened John?
Tell me.
John
Nothing Sir.
I just walked into the door.
Mr Cox
Well if that was the case get
on with your experiments.
The class get on with their experiments and the bell goes.
Mr Cox
Right class don’t forget that
there is a test next week.
The class rush to leave the door while John stairs angrily at the group of bully’s who were smoking earlier. John ends up putting his stuff away when his penknife falls out the bag.
CUT TO:
INT. JOE’S PARENTS FLAT – JOE’S BEDROOM – EARLY EVE.
JOE, a big headed kid is sitting playing computer games while taking a drink from a cheap 2ltr bottle of cider. He is talking over the mic to his friends joking on about what happened today.
JOE:
Yea Cock-head never realised a thing. You guys think we should use the Bunsen burner next week?
Joe receives a text.
JOE:
Ah fuck guys, after this game I’ve got to go. Stupid parents want me to go to the shop for them. Might get some more drink while I’m out.
CUT TO:
MONTAGE: INT. JOE’S PARENTS FLAT – JOE’S BEDROOM – EARLY EVE & INT. JOHN’S PARENTS HOUSE – JOHN’S BEDROOM – EARLY EVE.
1. JOE is playing computer games.
2. JOHN is opening and closing his knife.
3. JOE is turning off his console.
4. JOHN is packing his backpack.
5. JOE is grabbing a shopping list.
6. JOHN is putting on a dark hoodie.
7. JOE takes a drink from his cider bottle.
8. JOHN is turning off his computer.
9. JOE is grabbing his wallet.
10. JOHN is putting his backpack on.
JOHN turns to go but stops. He turns back and grabs his knife as he does he knocks a glass over. He goes to get it and cuts himself on the glass, he turns and leaves. JOHN slams the door shut. The glass can is lying there, with a line of blood trickling down one side.
JOE turns to go but stops. He turns back and grabs the shopping list, as he does he knocks the bottle of cider over. He goes to get it but is called out by his parents, he turns and leaves. JOE slams the door shut. The bottle is lying there, with a stream of cider trickling out.
CUT TO:
EXT. STREET CORNER: NIGHT.
It is situated in a rural suburb, down a side street just off a main road. The street is a quiet street with a large amount of cars parked on either side from the numerous houses lining the road. On the corner from one of the side roads, there is a small shop which JOE is standing outside off. A man smoking a cigarette is walking past on his way home from taking his dog for a walk.
JOE:
HEY M8! Could you go into the shop for me?
DOG WALKER:
Why should I go in for a kid?
JOE:
I’ll give you half the cig’s I get.
DOG WALKER:
Go on then, what do you want.
JOE hands over the shopping list and money to the man, while holding the man’s dog.
CUT TO:
INT. SHOP: NIGHT.
The dog walker is at the counter placing the shopping in the bag while handing the change over. There is a glimpse of a bottle of cheep cider and cigarettes.
CUT TO:
EXT. BACK STREET: NIGHT.
The street is dimly lit from lampposts at either end of the street and also from the windows at the backs of the houses. JOE is leaning against a wall smoking a cigarette and taking a drink of cider. Around the corner walks JOHN with his backpack on and his hands in his pockets.
JOE:
HEY DICK! Your parents decided to let their precious baby out the house so late did they?
JOHN:
Fuck off and die.
JOE:
WHAT DID YOU JUST SAY?
JOE runs at JOHN and a fight breaks out. JOE manages to get JOHN onto the ground and starts kicking him. When JOE steps back JOHN slowly starts to rise to his feet bruised and bloody from the fight.
JOHN:
Is that all you’ve got? Your mam fights better than that, and that’s when I had her last night.
JOE:
Don’t... you... dare speak like that about my mother.
JOE runs at JOHN again and goes to grab him. It looks like JOHN punches JOE and JOE falls to the ground holding his stomach. JOHN runs away. JOE starts convulsing and then eventually stops. You can see blood coming from JOE’s stomach with a knife handle sticking up from it.
INT. JOHNS HOUSE: DAY.
JOHN is slowly being lead away in cuff’s by two police officers while his Father (also in a policeman’s outfit) comforts his sobbing mother.
INT. POLICE CELL: DAY.
JOHN is pacing back and forth muttering to himself while a tray of food slides into his cell.
EXT. GRAVEYARD: DAY.
JOE’s coffin is slowly lowered into the grave with a lot of teenagers around in school uniform.
EXT. OUTSIDE COURTHOUSE: DAY.
Photographers are racing after a police van with darkened windows sticking their cameras up to the windows trying to get a picture of JOHN before his court appearance.
INT. COURTHOUSE - COURTROOM: DAY.
The courtroom is small and quiet. JOHN is sitting at the defence table with his Lawyer while the prosecution sit to the right of them. Everyone in the courtroom are looking at the jury.
JUDGE:
Members of the jury. Have you reached your verdict on the charge of murder?
JURY:
We have your honour. We find the defendant JOHN SINCLAIR, not guilty of murder.
JUDGE:
Have you reached the Verdict on the charge of manslaughter?
JURY:
We have your honour. We find the defendant JOHN SINCLAIR, guilty of manslaughter due to diminished responsibility through mental illness.
JUDGE:
Due to the nature of this case, I feel it is important for you to get round the clock psychiatric care. I feel placing you into a general prison population would be detrimental to your health, so I am sentencing you to an indefinite term of care into the national mental health care. Do you have anything to say?
John just stares at the Judge with a blank expression on his face.
JUDGE:
Take him away.
EXT. MENTAL HEALTH HOSPITAL: DAY.
A police convoy with a Police van in the center arrive at the entrance and lead JOHN inside.
INT. MENTAL HEALTH HOSPITAL: EVENING.
JOHN is sitting on his bed staring at the wall when a hatch at the bottom of the door opens and a tray of food is pushed inside. There is a small blade on the tray which appears to have been broken off from a Stanley knife.
VOICE OUTSIDE THE DOOR:
You might want to use this.
JOHN sits and stares at the blade, picks it up and looks at it. He then throws it at the door.
JOHN:
HELP! PLEASE SOMEBODY HELP ME! I’M SORRY! I DON’T WANT TO BE IN HERE! PLEASE!
Credits roll over a slowly darkening screen.
THE END
