New B&W Signature

Constructive Criticism please?
This is my very first attempt at a b&w piece... Help would be appreciated

 

I actually like this, Omg,
10/10
Nice job@

 

Haha Cheers man

Anyone such as Squidge or Haunted there to rip me into pieces, but at the same time give me some valuable help? ^_^

 

Great work, not even gonna lie. For your first try, you succeeded me by a long shot. (Basterd)
Ima try to give some criticism, so bear with me.
The focal point is centered around the girl's right cheek. What I would do, you don't necessarily have to,
is try to increase the focal point to at least the face area.
Trying to blend white and black - ehh - I don't really like it that much.
Otherwise, you did a great job, no lie.

 

Cheers =)
Anyone else have some feedback?

 

text is meh.
floating head is meh.
depth is meh.
lighting is meh.
flow is meh.
focal is meh.
composition is very bad.

well you need a light source t compliment the stocks shadows and light (cheek).

I dont like that c4d or brush covering her eye.

right side needs blending.

thats about it.

in summary: dont use floating heads. always put a light source that makes sense. dont whore effects and generally add more flow.

 

Zooomg Finally.
Thankyou Squidge, I'll work on it when I'm on my mac again, and post V2 later.
Cheeeeeeeers

 

Composition could be greatly improved, make the focal her eyes, not lips, it's always more effective. Create a light source which draws less attention than the focal. Too little contrast and too much negative space, also try use the rule of thirds effectively for your focal point.