Skanks Short Story Time: Bus and my deposit

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good story fam

 

Nice delivery and solid writing prose, I also liked how you used bold. Good job overall.

8/10 piece.

 

Overall your story isn't very straightforward in the beginning and it's not until your second paragraph that you realize where your story is headed. In order to have more people be engaged and read the whole story, it needs a new and more concise introduction. The piece, when taken as a whole, is relevant and very convincing in theory but starts slow and never lays out a concrete way of approaching this complex problem.