ad for a school project

[bigk1121]

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what do you think? CnC
tell me any imperfections before monday please. (thats when i print and mount it.
if you dont comment on it today there will be no point cuz im printing it on monday so hurry please!!!!

 

[Danai]

OK, I love the simplicity of this however there are a few things that need touching up.

Firstly your background glow is cut off on the left and this is very noticeable.

Secondly, the text at the bottom looks out of place and needs positioning better, maybe centered or fully along the bottom?

Personally, I don't like the wires either, but that's just me.

Other than that, good work!

 

[bigk1121]

OK, I love the simplicity of this however there are a few things that need touching up.

Firstly your background glow is cut off on the left and this is very noticeable.

Secondly, the text at the bottom looks out of place and needs positioning better, maybe centered or fully along the bottom?

Personally, I don't like the wires either, but that's just me.

Other than that, good work!

thanks for the cnc i will definitely put it to use. i will edit tonight an update.

 

[Ayy]

Green : Yellow text looks blurry and doesn't go well with white bg.
Red : Bulb & batteries doesn't mix well together, but it's no big deal.
Purple : Lines aren't equal and the text isn't in the middle.

 

[bigk1121]

Green : Yellow text looks blurry and doesn't go well with white bg.
Red : Bulb & batteries doesn't mix well together, but it's no big deal.
Purple : Lines aren't equal and the text isn't in the middle.

the text wont be blurrey it where i uploaded it. the text is actually vector so its crisp. thanks for noticing them likes idk why they aren't straight i held shift an moved it up in indesign.

 

[Ayy]

the text wont be blurrey it where i uploaded it. the text is actually vector so its crisp. thanks for noticing them likes idk why they aren't straight i held shift an moved it up in indesign.

Show us the next version when you make it

 

[Danai]

Green : Yellow text looks blurry and doesn't go well with white bg.
Red : Bulb & batteries doesn't mix well together, but it's no big deal.
Purple : Lines aren't equal and the text isn't in the middle.

wow, great eyes, I didn't notice this even after checking aha

 

[Ayy]

wow, great eyes, I didn't notice this even after checking aha

Haha, my eyesight irl is pretty bad though LOL

 

[THE ILL 90s]

Wires look a bit weird, but other than that it looks great.

 

[bigk1121]

Wires look a bit weird, but other than that it looks great.

they look way better with a high rez pic, i just didn't want to upload a pic that was larger than everyone's screen.

and ill upload a updated one tonight some time

 

[XX_PLANKER_xx]

Seems like youve used too many colors, the orange wires look awkward. And the placement of the text at the bottom is off putting. It should be centered like the rest of your picture. I like that you found a longer text for the word longer tho..

Also not that it matters but ive never seen aa's connected in that way.

And...really nitpicking here... but you have several different light sources

 

Looks really good, the simple ads are always the best ones

 

[bigk1121]

Seems like youve used too many colors, the orange wires look awkward. And the placement of the text at the bottom is off putting. It should be centered like the rest of your picture. I like that you found a longer text for the word longer tho..

Also not that it matters but ive never seen aa's connected in that way.

And...really nitpicking here... but you have several different light sources

yeah the to aa's conected that way is just kinda a joke.

 

[bigk1121]

updated version and in full size.
its not vector but still



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[Giantkahuna]

looks good there my criticism

 

[Jansen]

the statement is too disjointed. I like the style (pretty basic) but that needs to be fixed. Get the words closer together.