Small Essay Needs Correcting Etc.

Hey guys,

I know this sounds very dumb, but I made a very small essay for school, about communism, and I need some people to edit, spellcheck and just rephrase things if they so not sound right. I also need an effective way to conclude the brief oral presentation.

here it is. if you wish to edit, put it in quote tags.

here it is, and once again thank you very much

 

Absolutely, but as a fundamental incorporation, you should also state that it advocates collectivisation instead.

A dash should be used here - not a semi colon.

You've already done so in the above line. That was the definition of communism. Rather than repeating yourself, perhaps give an example of a current and past communist country.

No comma.

Too obscure. Develop your point.

That's utterly fallacious. What you are describing would be capitalism. Communism is not a 'practice', either. It is an ideology.

But, how can communism be the best kind of government? Well, it really

A practical improvement would be: ''Depends on a country's socio-economic aspects.''

''A communism'' does not make sense.

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