The shrunk in border is the first thing that caught my eye. No matter how cool you think they look they really don't work on most sigs. Its kinda plain and boring, the lighting is over done, looks like a soft brush was just plopped there. No blending of the render/focal. The flow is here but isn't all that great in complete honesty. Read some more tuts and start to develop your own style. Keep trying though!
Atleast you've got game taste Nero made a good point about the border, tone that down and you'll instantly see a difference. Theres also alot of empty space either side of the focal, something you'll want to avoid in the future.
The boarder like Nero said really needs to go. I like the lighting but you really should dim it down and maybe place it a little higher. I really don't get what that green blob on the left is? I don't really see much flow. This is one of your better tags. Keep progressing like this.
