a lil rhyme i wrote in jail

heres a lil something i freestyled in jdc so i wrote it down


i break bones,split domes,make ya girl moan(lol)
and burn homes with familys in em
cus i got that casualty rhythm
you try to rap when your skills be hallow
my slungs gon bust full throttle
putin multiple bullet holes in your baby bottle
12 gaje let you see the stars like airopossil
my two niggas be smith n wessin
where they sending you gods gonna be the one askin the questions

im not the best and if you guys can leave feedback and on what i need to work on id appreciate it

 

How about you learn how to spell?
Write about something other than being a scumbag,
Or Stop trying to rap altogether.

I think that would benefit you and everyone else.

 

well sir all i can say is

1:this is the internet so i can spell however i want so suck it
2:its just a rap im not raping about my life or anything its just a song so chill ya pussylips
3:dont think your better then everyone else
4:i said i was looking for help on my rap not a kid disrespecting me so please stop spamming my thread

 

POETRY IS FREE WRITING SO YOU CAN SPELL ANYTHING HOW IT IS BUD AINYTHING WITH RHYTHEM OR FLOW IS CONSIDERED POETRY

 

Not only do you suck but thinking you've been to jail...

 

lets hear you ??
Choke .... choke.. waiting. ... choke.
Thought so.

 

You weren't in jail.

And this is god awful.

 

its makes sense someone that dosnt know me is going to tell me where i went in the past? suckadick? and who ever said i sucked i know i do and i want pointers not some stupid ass spam now this is the reason i stoped going on sythe a year ago too much little kids with dicks up there ass

 

You got skills







hehe