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Life is like a book [Poem]

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  1. Glyder

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    Life is like a book [Poem]

    I wrote this poem for my English test on writing. I got a perfect 100.

    So tell me, what do you think of it?



    Life is like a book

    You read it, hoping for it to be good

    Each day, like a page turn

    Not knowing what is to come

    You have your good times

    And sad times, along with the bad times

    The mystery of a book

    Like life in a whole new way

    But when we realize what we’re here for

    The book starts to close

    And your life ends

    The book closes

    The story of your life.​
     
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    Very sweet poem ........Really life is just like your poem ......uncertain but lovely


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    Life is like a book [Poem]

    I really like your poem, but adding a rhyme scheme would improve it significantly.
     
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    Life is like a book [Poem]

    The topic for the test was a no-rhyme type. So I came up with this.

    Thanks for the good comments. :) Think I should write more? Alot of my friends say I am pretty good.

    Anybody else want to comment?
     
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    It's really good actually :)..you should write more
     
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    yeah i liked this although it is kinda short :/
    Try to extend them to entertain us!! :D
     
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    A lack of a flow, but a neat concept. I bet with a bit more work you could make it a little more enjoyable to read.

    You may have intended for it not to rhyme, but you still need a bit more rhythm.
     
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    :) Thanks guys. Yeah Imma write more. I'll be posting more of poems now.

    Thanks for the CC. It does help.
     
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    Interesting poem, I like it but it's very short and there's a slight lack of flow as Deacon Frost said. Hope to see some more pieces from you, I like this.
     
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    Bump.

    More input please?
     
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    I really liked it, you could make it more in-depth and maybe use words that aren't as simple.
    All-in-all it was very nice poem.
     
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    Everything is alright, but I don't like the ending to much. Even if it ties into the Life (book/poem) ending, It was just too soon. Try to put a few more words of closure.
     
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    Thanks. :)
     
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    I like it....
     
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    No offense, but did I give you permission to edit or use it?
     
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    Chill brother, it's not for my personal uses. I'll edit it out.
     
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