how is my rap sound

Damn this shit sound low then motherfucker in my earphones.
Alright, yeah that's it right there nigga.

As soon as the bass hits your dome
Big dawg grabs the chrome
And gets in your system
Shootin off rhymes like a pistol
Fuckin your click off with this blow
This hoe, that hoe make me rich
big dawg please won't you break that biach
I'm back in the game gettin my dough
And fuck any motherfucka that say it aint so
Do it to em be young
Cause on the real dogg you the hardest nigga we know
We shakin em off, breakin em off
Shot him in his face and now they takin him off
Heres a shoutout to those with quad out
Fool we should have got out, now you gettin popped out
Im not out to diss but to get my chips
And smash, pass with cash
And blaze the spliff now pass the fifth
For real nigga did you hear me, ya heard
You ran up and got served, ha ha
Now ain't that a trip (what what)
You need to get up off of that bullshit
C'mon

and also.. how can I look more intimidating. like I want to gain acceptance to the real gangstas in the hood.

 

Sup vader.

 

First of all I would like to say "TIMOTHY WESTWOOD!"

You are NOT black, so don't try be, especially with a name like TIMOTHY.

 

this nigga just dropped some knowlage on yo ass.

 

hey fuck u white boy u gt no buisness with the word nigger fool, and ur rap aint shit.

 

i got mad skills, ya'll niggas is just denying it.

 

Mad skills with your mom?

 

why ya'll niggas hatin on my freestyling skills. damn. i get mad respect irl yo dont hate. hate it or love the games on top, im gonna shine homie till my heart start, go head and envy me, im raps MVP, and I aint goin nowhere till you get to know me.

 

;\ I thought it was pretty good.

 

Haha Thats My Nigga

 

anyone wanna freestyle battle me around this mothafucka come here. i fuck u up

 

Lovin that 25 cent chain around your neck.

The rap was definitely a beginner one. Experienced rappers do not use that many repetitive words in that short of an excerpt. But reading it regularly sounds pretty, ehh, decent. You will improve over time.

 

Didn't think it was too fucken bad,

 

Now how can I explain how this game laced, plus with this fame
I got enemies that do anything to break me, my attitude changed
Got to the point where I was driven, twenty-fo/seven
Money's my mission, just a nigga trying to make a living
These busta tricks don't want no mail
They spending they riches on skanless bitches
who'll stay petrified in jail
It's hell, plus all the dealers want a meal ticket
Jealous-ass bitches, player-hating but we still kick it
Always keep my eyes on the prize, watch the police
Seen so much murder, neighborhoods getting no sleep
But still, I get my money on major, continuously
Communicating through my pager, niggaz know me
Don't have no homies cause they jealous, I hustle solo
Cause when I'm broke I got no time for the fellas, listen
Ain't nothing poppin 'bout no broke nigga, ain't no joke
Fuck what they say and get your dough nigga

 

I'm just a young white male, cursed since my birth
Had to turn to crack sales, if worse come to worse
Headed for them packed, jails, or maybe it's a hearse
My only way to stack mail, is out here doing dirt
Made my decisions do or die, been hustling since junior high
No time for asking why, gettin high, gettin mine
Put away my nine, cause these times call for fo-five sales
cause life is hell and everybody dies
What about these niggaz I despise -- them loud talking cowards
shootin guns into crowds, jeopardizing lives
Shoot em right between them niggaz eyes, it's time to realize
follow the rules or follow them fools that die
Everybody's trying to make the news, niggaz confused
Quit trying to be an O.G. and pay your dues
If you choose to apply yourself, go with the grain
and come the riches and the bitches and the fame

 

nice liked it

 

stay up. i appreciate the props nigga

 

I went from a young nigga livin residential to a young nigga livin presidential. Im pistol whippin these pimps, for being petrified and lame
they disrespectin the game prayin for punishment and pain

 

You need to expect the biggest pack when buying from Mr. Nutsac because he is harder than titanium combined with Arnold Schwarzenegger's six pacc.

 

Its pretty good but you gotta come up wit a stage name. Rather than Timothy.