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  1. Unread #1 - Nov 20, 2009 at 10:43 AM
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    Poem i wrote when i was 12
    I wrote this poem when my mom died when i was 12.

    Gone Just for Little While

    I'm gone for a little while don't shed any tears
    Im with you in spirit and will be with you for all your years.

    I taught you every thing you need to know
    to get through life it soon will show.

    Just follow the path and live your life right
    You will grow to a person that can love and not fight.

    I'll see you soon so you don't need to cry
    We can hug and kiss and I'll teach you to fly.

    Please do not start this as a debate about Christianity. I am christian and proud of it. If you start a debate it will be reported as spam thank you.
     
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  3. Unread #2 - Nov 20, 2009 at 11:06 AM
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    Poem i wrote when i was 12
    Goodjob! Sorry for your loss.
     
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  5. Unread #3 - Nov 22, 2009 at 10:18 PM
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    Poem i wrote when i was 12
    Very good.
    Touching and relatable.
     
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  7. Unread #4 - Nov 22, 2009 at 11:20 PM
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    Poem i wrote when i was 12
    Dude that poem was amazing man :(
     
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  9. Unread #5 - Nov 23, 2009 at 12:32 AM
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    Poem i wrote when i was 12
    I'm sorry that your mom died. Great Poem though. Very Heartfelt.
     
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  11. Unread #6 - Nov 23, 2009 at 6:11 PM
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    Poem i wrote when i was 12
    Nice poem, sorry about your mom dying.
     
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  13. Unread #7 - Nov 27, 2009 at 7:35 PM
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    Poem i wrote when i was 12
    im very sorry. but i have to say thats a very nice poem
     
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  15. Unread #8 - Nov 27, 2009 at 9:43 PM
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    Poem i wrote when i was 12
    Thanks guys.
     
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  17. Unread #9 - Dec 17, 2009 at 11:29 AM
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    Poem i wrote when i was 12
    Very good i felt your death almost! 10/10
     
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  19. Unread #10 - Dec 18, 2009 at 9:46 AM
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    Poem i wrote when i was 12
    I can feel it...
    This is amazing, true emotion written through words
     
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  21. Unread #11 - Dec 18, 2009 at 12:23 PM
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    Poem i wrote when i was 12
    Very moving poem, i don't understand how this relates to christianity?
    Edit: Don't report me for spam, i just don't understand what the bottom part means?
     
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  23. Unread #12 - Dec 18, 2009 at 3:21 PM
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    Poem i wrote when i was 12
    great poem especialy if you wrote it when you where 12 :) and sorry
     
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  25. Unread #13 - Dec 18, 2009 at 7:14 PM
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    Poem i wrote when i was 12
    Good poem for 12! r.i.p
     
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  27. Unread #14 - Dec 19, 2009 at 2:48 AM
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    Poem i wrote when i was 12
    It's good for a 12 year old.
    I didn't feel the emotion, though.
     
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  29. Unread #15 - Feb 2, 2010 at 3:23 AM
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    Poem i wrote when i was 12
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    U r a real champ....nice rhythm
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  31. Unread #16 - Feb 4, 2010 at 9:37 AM
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    Poem i wrote when i was 12
    nice poem, and sorry =\
     
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  33. Unread #17 - Mar 4, 2010 at 12:09 PM
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    Poem i wrote when i was 12
    Good poem,i am very sorry about your mom dying.

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  35. Unread #18 - Mar 4, 2010 at 2:29 PM
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    Poem i wrote when i was 12
    Its a good thought, as a person I thought it was great.
    As an experienced writer, I'd say it needs some work. I'm sure you don't care much for an in-depth analysis, since that more than likely wasn't the whole point of the writing piece.
     
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  37. Unread #19 - Mar 4, 2010 at 2:48 PM
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    Poem i wrote when i was 12
    You can hug and kiss? This poem is about your mom, so I find that gross.

    Not trying to be rude, and I am sorry for the loss of your mother.
     
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