some lyrics/poetry i wrote, simple and beautiful

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some lyrics/poetry i wrote, simple and beautiful
  1. Unread #1 - Dec 3, 2009 at 10:06 PM
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    some lyrics/poetry i wrote, simple and beautiful

    these are pretty simple but if you let them sit with you it really makes you think, i wrote these btw... the title is "Sep" (oh and the things in parenthesis are sort of echoed)






    Quadruplets, triplets, twins even..
    All just trying to live individually.
    Metaphors for groups of people.
    Trying to break free, not be compared.
    Its a common goal for most of us,
    except for, the ones, who find comfort in conformity.

    Try being sep (seperate.)
    Try being sep (september)
    BEFORE the col (collectibles)
    BEFORE the col (cold).

    Try, break, agree, dis (disagree)
    Try, freedom, cry, dis (disillusionate)

    Thought bubbles, carrying no weight, for thought is not material, thought is revolution.


    hope you enjoyed, please comment, positive and negative feedback, constructive criticizing, be honest, but let the words sink in before commenting. if you say bad shit your just an asshole and you obviously havent read the lyrics your just a troll so dont. but actually read it i hope you enjoy it k thanks for the support guys
     
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    some lyrics/poetry i wrote, simple and beautiful

    What kind of Music are you gonna use with these lyrics ?
     
  5. Unread #3 - Dec 13, 2009 at 4:56 AM
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    some lyrics/poetry i wrote, simple and beautiful

    last part i didnt think was done well, i think it would be better without brackets
     
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    some lyrics/poetry i wrote, simple and beautiful

    and u got banned. wow that poem must of been really aweful
     
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    some lyrics/poetry i wrote, simple and beautiful

    lol i didnt even understand it man... wtf???
     
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    some lyrics/poetry i wrote, simple and beautiful

    He's trying to talk about being an individual... Its kind of shitty lyrics with a good thought... >_<
     
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