Poetry Round 2- Epiphany

I posted a carpe diem waay back this year, and hella people liked it...
So I'm here to post a new poem I wrote not too long ago.
Read it, I'm pretty sure you wont be disappointed =)
If you are, you can get a refund back.
Link to the blog,http://blogs.myspace.com/index.cfm?fuseaction=blog.view&friendId=27017793&blogId=510512727
or here:



This my friends, is called creating a new form of poetry, && taking it to another level=)


Please, withhold from any ovation, while I tell you a story of my current situation…
I do not care what you might put into speculation,
Although somebody might spread a deadly allegation.
It’s just that my heart aches daily from this pain; you see, she is my only vaccination.

For the time being, in this short duration,
Some people might think this is pure exaggeration,
When I say this girl controls me like an addict on drugs. Seriously, no hallucination.
She is not the product of my pure imagination,

I might lose grip of reality though; she makes my heart race with total anticipation,
Writing in my journal, making plans for future preparation.
I have watched her with precise observation,
The day I act I want it to go smoother than a bear sleeping during hibernation.

She is my sweet escape and the biggest source of inspiration,
Like touching the sky, she gives me no limitation.
When I’m with her I feel like I can go beyond any human expectation,
I can be a star that brightens her night… scratch that, I’ll be the biggest constellation.

If she becomes a teacher, show me the detention hall and I’ll be there for life if
She just would give me an application. She might not see me as a perfect equation,
I’m not talking multiplication, but this is easier than simplification.
So give me the final exam, because I’ll pass far beyond the average qualification.

Call it determination, without a doubt, no hesitation.
If she only knew, how we just could make the perfect collaboration.
This isn’t merely a small temptation, nor a preeminent infatuation,
No. The world will never find a better combination.

Being away from her makes me so sick like eating old food, a major contamination.
My feelings go harder then when people were biased on colors with discrimination,
If she held a charity, I’d give all I have to make the biggest donation.
Better yet, if she ever held charity and I was broke, I’d give her myself as a donation.

Her comfort is my only obligation,
So when she comes to the realization,
That we do have plenty in relation,
I’ll be the fertilizer in her life, we will grow like a farmer who loves his vegetation.

The day she gives me the green light, better known as “the” indication,
I’ll call President Obama and say tonight’s his treat; to the entire United States nation.
We will hold a massive celebration, then I’ll take her on a Bahamas exploration,
Talking to her alone, just talking to her, causes this delirious sensation.

I’m ready! I have put so much thought about us into consideration,
A life with her is a new beginning, a total revelation.
I do not need the Fono or the United States Legislation,
To tell me that this isn’t a poem; I’ll tell them, “Sorry, This Is MY Declaration.”

This is it! She’s got my heart under total confiscation,
I’m going to tell her to put me into consideration, just don’t make me a violation!
Like a Powerade, she quenches my thirst when I suffer from dehydration.
If there are any other competitors, I will NEVER want to win a consolation.

I’m ready! I scroll through the phone book to find her cell phone information…
(Ringing) (Gulp); (trying not to show hesitation, for the fear of utter humiliation)
(Ringing); Her voicemail. “Just leave a message after the indication,
And I'll call you back, when my boyfriend and I come back from vacation."

 

That was GREAT! with an excellent finish!!!!

 

Didn't think anybody was going to reply at the rate it was going-.-
Seems like everybody's too busy spamming checking out everything else to appreciate the poetry forum..oh wells.
haha, okay so my friends weren't just acting when they said they all liked it....anybody else? =/ any constructive criticism is appreciated.

 

Bump?
This forum is pretty dead, or my poetry isn't as good as I thought.
"Where Is The Love"-Black Eyed Peas =)
Listening&&rapping to it right now... Those are truly some influential lyrics.

 

I liked it dude, and yeah, nice finish

 

very nice finish . great work XD

 

Thanks you two, almost forgot I posted this up.
Positive feedback from temporarily banned members are totally ftw! ;p
So far all comments have been favorable =)