Mystery. [CnC Needed]

Basically, I tried to vary my usual "Smudge" style, and came up with this;



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V2; (the TRIBAL in the bg was too obvious for my liking)


Which i need to improve, since, as usual, habits can kill skill.

Please give decent comments and advice, spammers and such will be infracted.

 

The bolt of lighting seems to be the focal of this tag.
Also the text isn't top notch and dislocated from the focal of the tag ( the render).

 

Flow and composition suck.
Lightning bolt is the focal.
Way too blurred.
The text is bad, change it.

 

The render is too blury, the text is too modern and the lightning bolt is too obvious.

 

Imo all I see is light. I think you should down the light and up the contrast.