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My First ever song pelase rate.
  1. Unread #1 - May 13, 2009 at 1:51 PM
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    My First ever song pelase rate.
    What is my dream?
    What is it that I want?
    I want to make music
    A type of music,


    A type of music
    Witch is a way to express how I feel
    by writing it on paper
    or typing it on a computer


    I would turn it into a song
    with lyrics of my life
    mixed in with a beat
    and produced with a label
    then put on a shelf
    for others to purchase
    and listen to at home


    What is my dream?
    What is it that I want?
    I want to make music
    A type of music,

    A type of music that
    Some people call rap
    Some may call it hip hop
    But I call it life,
    In my words
    For your listening pleasure

    What is my dream?
    What is it that I want?
    I want to make music
    A type of music,

    So that’s my dream,
    that’s what I want.
    Call me old fashioned
    But that’s how it is.
    And it’s not going to change
    no matter whatever you say

    What is my dream?
    What is it that I want?
    I want to make music

    I just want to make music.











    soo... that's my song. please rate it, tell me whats wrong, what i can change. thanks guys!
     
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  3. Unread #2 - May 16, 2009 at 12:55 AM
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    My First ever song pelase rate.
    no offense but this sounds more like a poem
     
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  5. Unread #3 - May 17, 2009 at 2:29 PM
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    My First ever song pelase rate.
    your my hero
     
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  7. Unread #4 - May 17, 2009 at 5:16 PM
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    My First ever song pelase rate.
    Nice lyrics but too many spelling mistakes...
     
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  9. Unread #5 - May 18, 2009 at 9:26 AM
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    My First ever song pelase rate.
    yeah dude it kinda sounds like a poem...
     
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  11. Unread #6 - May 19, 2009 at 5:02 PM
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    My First ever song pelase rate.
    yea, that alright, but im sure if you kept it up, you'de get alot better =D lol
     
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  13. Unread #7 - May 19, 2009 at 10:41 PM
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    My First ever song pelase rate.
    lol 1/7
     
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  15. Unread #8 - May 20, 2009 at 8:57 AM
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    My First ever song pelase rate.
    Don't sound like it would flow too well, sounds like it would go to somthing RandB like :p

    2/7
     
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  17. Unread #9 - May 21, 2009 at 2:11 AM
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    My First ever song pelase rate.
    alright lyrics i guess, 6/10
     
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  19. Unread #10 - May 21, 2009 at 2:33 AM
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    My First ever song pelase rate.
    I cried :')....DREAMS...
     
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  21. Unread #11 - May 21, 2009 at 11:00 PM
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    My First ever song pelase rate.
    lol.. it IS a poem. But I made it in almost no time at all to be honest. Not complete, any suggestions?
     
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  23. Unread #12 - May 22, 2009 at 8:33 PM
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    My First ever song pelase rate.
    not enuf bars to make it a song / track w/e u wanna call it really.


    for a poem seems ok, look thru and find like differents words to use in replacement.

    when writing i always find long words that rhyme sound more impressive but not all do. personal opinion
     
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  25. Unread #13 - Jun 15, 2009 at 11:48 PM
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    My First ever song pelase rate.
    this doesnt sound like a acually song but ye. kinda short
     
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  27. Unread #14 - Jun 16, 2009 at 1:05 AM
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    My First ever song pelase rate.
    it doesnt rhyme?
     
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  29. Unread #15 - Jun 17, 2009 at 1:20 AM
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    My First ever song pelase rate.
    this was more of a poem, the style was written in poem format... but good piece
     
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  31. Unread #16 - Jun 17, 2009 at 7:33 AM
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    My First ever song pelase rate.
    I you put a decent beat with it i'm sure it will be good, Gl with the music biz lol.
     
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  33. Unread #17 - Jun 20, 2009 at 8:53 PM
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    My First ever song pelase rate.
    We can't really tell because it doesn't rhyme... And if it doesn't rhyme we need a beat.
     
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  35. Unread #18 - Jun 26, 2009 at 12:29 AM
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    My First ever song pelase rate.

    yeah that was pretty much the whole idea :D
     
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  37. Unread #19 - Jun 26, 2009 at 1:54 AM
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    My First ever song pelase rate.
    Here's what I get from it:

    You want to sell out, and make lots of money.


    You want to make music regardless of fame and fortune.



    Mixed messages. D:
     
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  39. Unread #20 - Jun 26, 2009 at 1:58 AM
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    My First ever song pelase rate.
    hot damn he's banned this fucker scammed me w00t w00t i rate 4 stars :) its a good song
     
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