Freestylee

yo yo. its brix here shout out to sythe
when i spit lyrics thell cut your verses up like a surgent would slice
if you loose against me, dont have an emo and act like you dont eprictiate life
Im the next best thing, first comes me next comes Vanilla Ice.
I gota phone call from a shot
He said he was outside the shop
But ill meet him in outside the block
Ill be there in 2 secs
When I rolled up he was standing with 2 tecks

Brix

 

The first 6 lines are good. The rest doesn't flow.

 

yea ending dont flow... start good tho..

 

The start of this is pretty nice I would say but at the ending that spark died out.

 

Thanks for the constructive critisisim

 

pretty good.. check mine out

http://sythe.org/showthread.php?t=577413
and
http://sythe.org/showthread.php?t=578945

 

Looking back on it all, I sit back and I laugh
Knowing how you had me going isn't even the half
I know all of your story and exactly who you are
How low you are to me to think you once were my star
I could have given all my love to you and given it well
To think I gave credit to you for saving me from my hell
You think you are so mighty and you think you're so high
When everything you ever are and were is all one big lie
You can reap what you seek and sink yourself in the deep
Because without you I can fly and dry the tears that I weep
You want to come with an act and put your face to the test
But a cheater and deceiver is what these eyes see best
I'm no fool anymore to shouldering all the blame
Running the same old lines and playing same old games
I'm giving His name the praise and throwing yours to the street
And you can sit back and think that it was me that was beat
And defeat will find its way into the heart and the mind
Get ready to accept it 'cause its not mine this time.


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