my first freestyle !

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my first freestyle !
  1. Unread #1 - Dec 12, 2007 at 3:25 PM
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    my first freestyle !
    heres teh link


    http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default.cfm?bandID=781689


    waring lil wayne style freestyle



    here are my lyrics and yes i made both my beats via fruity loops :p

    rate /10

    thnx :p also post how i can improve.
     
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  3. Unread #2 - Dec 12, 2007 at 3:36 PM
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    my first freestyle !
    you seem like your not trying to talk loud.

    It's ok. Sounds like your more talking.
     
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  5. Unread #3 - Dec 12, 2007 at 4:04 PM
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    my first freestyle !
    Its ok, but try to talk little faster
     
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  7. Unread #4 - Dec 12, 2007 at 7:50 PM
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    my first freestyle !
    ill work on that this time ima write it :p
     
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  9. Unread #5 - Dec 12, 2007 at 9:45 PM
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    my first freestyle !
    A: the beat sucks
    B: your style stinks
    C: talk louder
    D: rap about what you truly mess with
    E: A for effort

    rap = 6/10
     
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  11. Unread #6 - Dec 12, 2007 at 9:53 PM
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    my first freestyle !
    thnx My first try i was kinda nervous :)
     
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  13. Unread #7 - Dec 12, 2007 at 10:12 PM
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    my first freestyle !
    5/10 You need to deliver the punchlines, even if you can't rap you can perform it well... (Example= Lil John)
     
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  15. Unread #8 - Dec 12, 2007 at 10:38 PM
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    my first freestyle !
    lol lil john

    ok ill do it next time
     
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  17. Unread #9 - Dec 13, 2007 at 2:01 AM
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    my first freestyle !
    put more vocal into it.. speed it up and get agressive dood..
     
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  19. Unread #10 - Dec 13, 2007 at 11:53 AM
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    my first freestyle !
    ok ill work on it
     
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  21. Unread #11 - Dec 13, 2007 at 12:19 PM
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    my first freestyle !
    No... sounds like you are just reading it off the paper
     
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  23. Unread #12 - Dec 13, 2007 at 2:32 PM
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    my first freestyle !
    i wasent :) and if i was wudent you think id sount slower? i was kida saying it with a deepish voice..
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  25. Unread #13 - Dec 13, 2007 at 4:14 PM
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    my first freestyle !
    not bad, i would make my own beats using an actual synthesiser/keyboard and sequence it using a better prog like cubase, also your not putting yourself in it your just talking, one negative comment, i dont like that gun cocking sound every 2 secs. other than that is was ok, 7/10
     
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  27. Unread #14 - Dec 13, 2007 at 6:32 PM
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    my first freestyle !
    thnx and lol :p its every 1.3secs lol
     
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  29. Unread #15 - Dec 13, 2007 at 7:52 PM
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    my first freestyle !
    Wanna audio battle?
     
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  31. Unread #16 - Dec 13, 2007 at 8:07 PM
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    my first freestyle !
    THis isn't an actual "FREESTYLE". It sounds more like "reading of a peice of paper". Also, that's a shit song. Choose a better beat. 5/10 for the effort.
     
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  33. Unread #17 - Dec 13, 2007 at 11:26 PM
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    my first freestyle !
    cu i would my mic broke or i wuda been updated my beats n styles

    beat is originaly made by me and it was a freestyle
     
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  35. Unread #18 - Dec 17, 2007 at 6:15 PM
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    my first freestyle !

    I'd agree with most of this, but who says you need to rap about what you truly mess with?

    Many rappers rap about how hard the life is in the "hood" while they live in extremely luxurious mansions.

    ~Tumma.
     
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  37. Unread #19 - Dec 17, 2007 at 6:26 PM
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    my first freestyle !
    umm honestly I think the beat was HORRIBLE, next time use an instrumental from a professional like 9th Wonder, Premo, or Pete rock.

    the lyrics were decent but you should work on your pronunciation and your flow, cos during certain parts you were terribly off beat.

    stay up, kid
     
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  39. Unread #20 - Dec 17, 2007 at 9:43 PM
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    my first freestyle !
    thnx i will as soo nas i rebuy a damn mic lmao
     
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