my youtube video poem/rap freestyle any views appreciated

Any feed back would be appreciated ! I don't think many people get this kind of stuff but it's art in some form or another and helps me with anxiety/depression, but don't be afraid to leave negative feedback either I'll take what I can get . Excuse the poor quality but I don't have proper recording equipment!

 

Its good man, try a slower beat, and just do short rhyming couplets until you find a nice flow.

You need to work more on the flow than the lyrical content, your writing seems a lot more advanced than your actual pronunciation when spitting.

I feel your lyrics though, I can tell from this one video that you take care of how it is written on paper, it all means something to you close to your heart.

Start at the beginning, choose your favourite rapper, just completely copy his flow. Practice that one song again and again till you know all the lyrics off by heart.

pronounce the lyrics how they do, get a proper feel for the "Rhythm" of the beat and match the words to that


And... SPEAK UP, I know your equipment Isn't amazing but get close to the mic, we want to hear every word, it sort of sounds a bit mumbled at points like you are shyly reading a poem over a beat.

All in all, good on you man following something that makes you happy Keep it up

PS: a good way to ease the strain of anxiety/depression is Mindfulness, its not any of this hippie mumbo-jumbo, scientifically proven to help in most cases and will improve all aspects of your life if you do it proficiently