english controlled assesment

hi i got asked to do a creative peace of writing, and the stimulus was robots fighting with humans

i have currently come up with this

English Controlled Assessment Plan
“It is my duty to protect humanity and for that reason I am extremely reluctant in bringing a newer generation of robots!, I think we all know the NSR’S are quite enough, it just won’t work; they are detrimental to humans and I know what the consequences will be”, ‘Doctor Laning shouted’. “But Doctor you must understand if we do not obey them, they will start revolution between us”, Coal replied. Doctor Laning thought closely for the next coming days on what Coal had said but was forced to make no changes, of course he knew what would happen, but he seemed very restrained, and in a state of depression.
Laning was a specialist in designing and creating robots he had been in the field for over 20 years and was well experienced; furthermore he was the founder of NSR (a robot- creation centre). What Latanic (Leader of all USR robots), wanted was peace and equality between robots and humans but this could not happen whilst Dr Laning was alive; Latanic was a devious and sincere character (robot), who would do anything to get his own way and what he wanted now was the death of Laning and his old generation of robots. He had been planning this for 12 years but now he thought was the time to take some action, and began his journey.

Thoughts i still have alot to go

i am in england year 9

 

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Anyway Typo fixes:

"they will start >>a<< revolution between us"

"He had been planning this for 12 years but now he thought >>a word needs to go here<< was the time to take some action, and began his journey."