My shit

Yo this is my shit
Yo ass finna get hit
all my other raps rhyme with bit
so I finna stop with it.

nigga gonna bust some chops
boutta get 'rested by them cops
clean you ass up with a couple mops
then take them mops cops and chops and open up a couple shops
to sell that shit
and baseball mits
and I'm rhyming with shit again
yo momma's a fat hen
fuckin all them men
specially that nigga Ben
I'm not writing this shit with a pen
ya dig?
I'm big
aint no nig
lemme get a cig
you fat bastard pig
I aint eva had a fig
imma make this rap part of my gig
ya feel me?
we
I gotta pee
mother fuckin bumble bee
dexters sister is deedee
got dat key?
This is a good rap
I aint even need a map
But I do need a nap
No I'm not a trap
seran wrap
monkey tap
monkey is an animal
yo momma is an animal
and a frog
this damn fog
yo mom is also a fat hog
my dick is like a log
I put my log in the hog in the fog



That's part one of my new mix tape I'm tossin around. Lemme know whatchoo thank.

 

Honestly, you have good metaphors, but you don't know how to use them. I barely see any sort of flow lyrically besides the fact that you're rhyming basically every three words together.

 

The Rap made me Lol.

But besides that agree ith the Above

 

i like it not bad at all

 

Not bad

 

This pretty much it, I also did find it amusing.

It sounded like more of a poem in the end.

Also for this line

Not exactly sure how the tone goes, but I think it's 1-2 syllable too many. I'd remove bastard, or if you want to remove just 1 syllable put "big fat pig"

 

I personally like the part about the seran wrap

 

I'll rate your shit if you rate mine. Be honest you mother fucker. All in all this was a good rap but it seems a little simple, or maybe the verses are just to short. If you extend each verse and it's not just log hog dog I think it would be a lot better.

 

Yeaa dawg, ya know, that's what I'm tryina do. It's my first shizzle, so we'll see what the future holds. I know this rap is ILL and you probably think there's no way I can possibly make it better, but there is and you'll see... you'll see.

 

Honestly? It's your shit. With that point your right lol, dude everyone can ryhme like that.

 

Yeah this made me roll, and sounded like a 13 year old was trying to rap.
Also wouldn't it be good to post a beat along with your rap. Probably would be better to follow.

 

This made me laugh. Thank you. Good lyrics.

 

Why don't you appreciate his witty humor?

 

i get money
your my honey
beastiality nigga
get me a bunny
get paid er'day like 4 hunny
i weigh my white shts like 4 tunny
Fuck boys think this is funny?
Sniffin so much my nose gets runny
Go Se7en, gluttony boy and you chubby
Jewish nigga let me call my bubby
Go to an asian massage and a gets tuggy
Ill ride out this bitch like im in a Dune Buggy.

Fuck boy, anyone can rhyme like that.

 

I can already tell you're one of those hollister tryhard faggots by the amount of times I've seen you post fuckboy..

OT, this is pretty dope, made me lol.