Judge My Lyrics

Saying Good Bye​

Kneeling by your grave asking how i am supposed to be brave



Everything about you is what i miss as i remissness



As i walk down the street i can't help but think your every face i pass wishing i could

turn back the hour glass



I try so hard to forget but I'm harassed by the past



Every picture i past is another memory it hurts so badly



Your always on my mind somehow it feels like your there to remind your never far behind



I feel your hand on my shoulder to keep me from slipping even when I'm tripping



You are and now always will be my guardian angel ready and able to keep me stable



Even when i fall i know you will be there to keep me standing tall



As i say good by to the memories for one last time as i watch you climb



To the heavens I'm ready to embrace you from a another place



You will always have a special place deep down in my heart we'll never be apart

 

Nice dude Do you do this kind of thing often, or just a one off?

Pretty nice!

 

Thanks allot really appreciate well i have been writing since i was 14 now i am 20, Just started writing lyrics like these like 2 years ago, I used to rap but matured and realized that was stupid, Tho thanks again if i get more responses ill definitely post more.

P.S. I know these lyrics do not have choruses and hooks etc... i do not know how to write in correct format if somebody does please message me i would love to learn how to improve.

 

They don't flow for me when i sing them for myself. Is this supposed to be straight up rapping, or just some song?

 

4/10 tbh not much flow sorry :/

 

Was supposed to be a Song OK well i thank you both for the feedback can one of you offer some advise to improve my flow and what not?

 

Make the lyrics actually rhyme?

 

Well Umadtho i like both type of feedback bad and good but umm it did rhyme most of it did actually think there is like 4 bars that didn't ryhme so yea that was shitty advise lol anything else i can do.

 

3/10 tbh