Funny Poem I wrote, tell me what you think

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Funny Poem I wrote, tell me what you think
  1. Unread #1 - Apr 29, 2012 at 12:15 PM
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    Funny Poem I wrote, tell me what you think

    Just got bored and wrote this poem. It's called "ODE TO White kids to rap". Tell me what you think about it.:)



    No, I do not sell drugs, I do not drive a Caddy.
    I have Never been in jail and yes I know my daddy.
    No, I have not been shot at, and probably never will.
    I have never snorted coke from a rolled up dollar bill.
    No, I do not smoke Newports, nor am I black or brown.
    Yes, I do say nigga, (only when they're not around).
    Yes, I do like mayonnaise and I have lived in a Mobile Home.
    Yes, I am really pale, and I have minutes on my Mobile Phone.
    Yes, I do like rap music, and lots of rap musicians.
    Yes, I can name more rappers, than active politicians.
    I actually like to rap you see, and that is not a sin.
    Why can't we whites just R-A-P (I blame Eminem)
    No, I do not think I'm black, nor do I want to be.
    I do not need a special fund, or a month of history.
    White rappers are rappers too, of this you can be sure
    The only difference is we have a better credit score.
    No longer will you judge me, because I like rap instead of pop
    By the color of my skin, or the fact that I like the cops.
    You see my name is Abernathy, and I don't like to brag
    But... I spit nasty flows like period blood, When a bitch is on the rag.
    Except I spit that real shit, all days of the month.
    Unlike a menstrual cycle, which flow betwixt thine cunt.
    People always ask me, how do you come up with these things?
    I say.."Well, I'm like a tampon thief, I had to pull some strings"
    This was my two cents, about white kids who like rapping.
    Thank you all for reading, though you're probably alt+tabbed fapping.
    The most important thing you'll learn today, If you're white and are not mixed...
    Don't EVER say the nigger word, you stupid cracker bitch.
    Remember!
    If you want to be a famous white rapper, and you think you have the wit
    Don't quit your job at burger king, you sorry piece of shit.
    You're white.....

    THE END
     
  3. Unread #2 - Apr 29, 2012 at 12:22 PM
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    Funny Poem I wrote, tell me what you think

    Pretty decent tbh
     
  5. Unread #3 - Apr 29, 2012 at 12:27 PM
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    Funny Poem I wrote, tell me what you think

    Lmao! This is sick, but really racist :p
     
  7. Unread #4 - Apr 30, 2012 at 12:41 PM
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    Funny Poem I wrote, tell me what you think

    dats funny bro
     
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    Funny Poem I wrote, tell me what you think

    It's pretty good. A bit racist thou..
     
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    Funny Poem I wrote, tell me what you think

    Its interesting poem :d
     
  13. Unread #7 - May 10, 2012 at 6:08 AM
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    Funny Poem I wrote, tell me what you think

    Found it pretty funny.

    If you work on the lyrics a little, you can make them flow, and make it end up being a pretty lyrical song.
     
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    Funny Poem I wrote, tell me what you think

    good i suppose. fairly racist and taps on stereotypical cliches but i suppose rappers have it coming based on the way they speak
     
  17. Unread #9 - May 14, 2012 at 5:15 PM
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    Funny Poem I wrote, tell me what you think

    The lyrics were good and all, I think with a bit of work here and there you can make them flow a bit better, maybe tone down the racism a tad.. but that's just my opinion other then that good job.
     
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