English poem input?

Done, got 97%, thanks.

 

There is so much you can do with this. You can take it as anti-technology and cynical look at humanity, which is the way I would go with.

 

That's what I'm focusing on for now, would it be worth to include any other outlooks on the poem?

 

In poetry everything you say is correct, especially in school/college levels providing you can justify it. I always use stanza structure, line structure and use of punctuation to make points. If that stanza was the entire poem then you could deffinately make a point about why the writer chose to list everything in a single stanza.

An example of what I mean which is very clear is a poem I once studied called 'Mother and distance'.
The poem is about a son moving away from his mother, both physically and mentally. In the poem there is numerous use of the '-' between words. Such as 100-miles. I got the higher graded mark on that section for using the - as a symbol of the son moving away from his mother as it creates distance.