Second Tag...

Slowly getting the hang of things again... Cnc is always appreciated
Thanks!







V1: http://piclion.com/images/secondici.png
V2: http://piclion.com/images/second2.png
V3: http://piclion.com/images/seconduiu.png

 

Depth is pretty good, but I am not a fan of how the foreground stuff is sort of ethereal. I feel that they're is a lot of negative space that isn't really balanced out well. All of the corners have a lot of negative space, and I also think that the flows are contradicting. The C4D to the left of her head is coming from the upper left and the C4D at her back is coming from the bottom right, but the foreground pieces go from lower left to upper right.

Edit: I am just nitpicking, I think it is awesome bro.

 

sharpen the focal

apart from that it's fucking sexy

 

also left side composition could be improved

 

I find that I get drawn to the front blackness instead of to the intended focal point. Also it looks like you added too much lighting effects around the render which really takes away from your tag. But other than that it looks pretty good. I know how hard it is to get back into your groove, just keep going!

 

I'm going to have to agree with Merchantofheaven, bit too much lighting around the render, maybe sharpen it up a bit. Looks great

 

Thanks for the feedback guys! I added a newer version

 

I like it, but I think you should of kept the C4D that was poking at her face. The lighting is a little bright but other than that it is still awesome.

 

Played with it round a little more after your suggestions ^_^ Whadya think?

 

I like it. The background C4D adds a lot more depth.

 

Lovely atmo and light, depth is good too. Would like to see some more going on in the background and foreground

 

colours could be balanced better

 

I've balanced the colour and have done a few more touch-ups on the lighting
Tried adding some additional background detail, but there's too much going on in my file and I'm finding it hard to make it fit!
I think I'll leave it like this...

 

The bubble c4d/specks you added really fit in well imho. Not sure what else you can do to the piece, so I understand when you say it's finished.

 

you f'ed up the lighting when you fixed the colours

sexy tho

 

You shuddup Surj! ^_^

Yeah I removed some of the illumination from the top - should probably have left it there.... I also added in lighting to the foreground c4d's, which was possibly a bad decision. Ah well I think I'll remember this for my next tag haha, too much time spent on one piece.