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Shame.

Discussion in 'Music' started by T R 1 B A L, Feb 4, 2009.

  1. T R 1 B A L

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    Shame.

    I hang my head with shame,
    for i know your wish came true,
    But where would i even be,
    If it wasn't for you,

    You told me that you loved me,
    It was a claim that i believed,
    A hope, that lived inside of me,
    hoping to break free.

    But then, the truth was told,
    And your love seemed so sublime,
    your glowing figure in my arms,
    holding you the very last time.
    ..

    (only sublime seemed to fit, don't ask...)
     
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    Shame.

    What makes love sublime? I don't understand
     
  3. The True Gears

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    But then, the truth was told,
    And your love seemed so sublime,
    your glowing figure in my arms,
    holding you the last time.

    On the last line put a "very" before last, I think it would make it sound not only better, but would add to the dramatic effect.
     
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