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Discussion in 'Music' started by stay bombin, Jan 12, 2008.

  1. stay bombin

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    idk if u guys will like it...im tryin to learn how to make some beats so if you know a good program i can get for free let me know.

    im from p town bitch, nah i dont claim blood but c's down bitch, the shit i claim is nsb, get ur shit straight, some hate but most dont and if u dont we wont. no one fucks with us cause they knows whats up, they seen it, haters gettin smashed on craked on and stepped on.
    run up on ya with black rags yellin nsb bitch give ur ur cash oben the stash then we dash. thats the routine, get it and go keep ur mouth shut and stay on the low.
    when i say jump bitch u say how high, when i say lets roll u dont ask why, when i ask you somethin dont lie and if u do that shit wont fly.



    a chorus i wrote
    we north side bombin all day spending money blow hay, trey sieto be the block that i stay fuck with us youll hear the spray then feel the ak niggah step up and get blwon away
     
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    make it so its more readable and in lines not just full sentences. It's alright but doesn't have any meaning, sorry.
     
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    Program = reason / fruity loop

    Mistake = When writting your bars dont use ... u = you .... ur = your ... ect... it makes it easyer.
     
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    That style is wack, set it out properly.
     
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    I don't think it's too good, work on vocabulary and basic literature, and then your structure alittle more, ofcorse I give you credit for giving a whirl at it.
     
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    How creative.... G-unit had the same line...
     
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    No meaning, you basically rapping the same shit that everyone else does.

    No originality.
     
  8. stay bombin

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    lol its a known saying not just them say that. and sorry ill use ur critisism and make some better ones guys
     
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    Ive seen those lines before lol .
     
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